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comment by lil
lil  ·  3789 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Improv Class number 2 - Movie Producers - Discussion

I hope the story works... I am afraid.





nowaypablo  ·  3787 days ago  ·  link  ·  

In regards to your opening to my suggestion:

    Her hair was dark and luxurious, her bosum ample, her figure svelte in a tight military uniform. She entered the cafe and sat across from him, looking directly into his eyes.

That was such a good line, like perfectly written and a touch of funny with the uniform thing. Svelte is the best word ever.

mknod  ·  3787 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Yeah lil wins the vocab award for sure! I've got to try using this word sometime!

mknod  ·  3788 days ago  ·  link  ·  

See? I told you it'd work out!

mknod  ·  3789 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Don't be afraid, trust your fellow players, and if you can't trust them, you can always just delete it.