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user-inactivated  ·  3095 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: The first draft of the player's guide to my new world

So, onwards to politics.

I'm gonna roll half of this into one quote.

    First of all, state names. There's nothing wrong with a state being known by the common name: Montenegro, for example, has its name directly translated in many languages, with the proper name being "Crna Gora", meaning "Black Mountain" (where "Montenegro" comes from Latin for it). However, having a state known by its proper name - let's say, "Crna Gora" - could be a sign of many things, respect and/or fear from other states and cultures being not the least of them. So, if "Elvenheim" or "P'phakhtanyar" are the proper names for their respective states, there would be nothing wrong with having them known as such both to the political elite and the general population, even with some of the names being difficult to pronounce - in which case, a common name might appear, like with München and it's English-language equivalent "Munich", which for a non-German is much easier to pronounce.

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    As a linguist, I always insist on having the name of the state come from the language its people bear. It doesn't make sense to have it the other way, unless common names are used. With the state of C'ae, I do have a question: what does the apostrophe stand for? Language evolves into simplicity, so using side symbols, especially in (what I assume to be) transliteration, would have to be under a strong enough justification. History knows both coming and going of symbols for various sounds even within a single writing system, as evident with the reforms of the Russian language (some subtle, some overt and officially-dictated), where "Ё" /jo/ became a part of the language after people've already been using "IО"/"ЙО" for the same sound and the infamous "Ѣ" /je/ went away under the 1917/1918 Soviet decrees. What justification does the goblin language and/or the transliteration of it into the common tongue that's used for relaying the world's information have for the apostrophe in the name? Besides, how does one pronounce the state name?

I am terrible with (natural) languages, and writing doesn't really come easily to me. Creating constructed languages feels way out of my depth, so I didn't really put much thought into it. I got Quatrarius to give me some jumping off points to learn about linguistics once, but I didn't really manage to internalize what I read.

I would pronounce C'ae as "Sea", but I don't have a linguistic reason to think that. I don't even know what it means right now, which is part of the reason I'm tempted to with just go with names in English.

    The subject of the capital of Dal and the seeming apathy of the inhabiting nation seem off to me. You'd never expect your capital city to be blown up, but... what do you do when it's gone and you still have the state to run? You move the capital. If you need officials, you elect them or let them take reign, which sounds like a good possibility in a fantasy world. Things will settle; but if the people remain passive, the state will inevitably fall - either due to entropy or external factors. In other words, I don't believe there could be such a thing as a "fallen kingdom": it's either history or in reform.

I'm starting the campaign about a month after the capital exploded. I'm assuming that with only conventional means to communicate, the chaos hasn't settled into an internal response yet. Particularly given that marshlands would hamper movement. The remaining lords are also discovering that the nation didn't have much military capabilities after relying on a now defunct deity's protection. It'd easy for outside actors that haven't lost their leadership to take advantage advantage of that, which is why Copeth is moving towards invading, and the Goblins are streaming in to claim land.

It's in the process of becoming a failed state, but isn't quite there yet. It might be better to describe it in terms of regional governments that still exist and are trying to reform into a national government.





user-inactivated  ·  3095 days ago  ·  link  ·  

I'll reply to both of your comments in this one.

    I quite like the idea that what I've outlined is all that exists in terms of analogs to humanity.

How's that analogous to humanity?

What you've figured out for the dwarves and their "alcohol" consumptions sounds fantastic! I like how advanced the idea is in terms of creativity.

    [Orcs] see the Humans, Dwarves, and Elves as weak for being willing to accept a top down government (Dwarves don't have it but wish to restore it). Not for having different blood, but for having different ideals and traditions.

So, you're saying that for an orc, there's a dichotomy of body and mind, or of blood and ideas? That's quite interesting. I'd like to see where this might lead to.

    Or that Orcs and Humans have a normal success rate at bearing a child.

Just a reminder: when talking about fantasy of whatever variety, there is no "normal". You have half-orcs, to say the least! How normal would that be? Consider using "average" instead, to avoid people thinking in terms of the norms they've gotten used to. This may allow for greater immersion.

    so it seemed necessary for them to have a way from them to cope with the bad hand they got dealt

Sounds rather anthropocentric, you considering their short lifespan to be a "bad hand". We don't look at turtles and angst about not having to live as long, do we? Their lifespan is what they've successfully dealt with for generations because it's the most natural time of living for them. Don't assign to them the idea in meta-perspective that they "should have had" to live longer. This non-judgemental line of thinking will allow you to make decisions on developing species - or anything, as a matter of fact - that add verisimilitude, which naturally entails greater immersion for the player. Think in terms of what a goblin would think of that instead of a human in the body of a goblin.

    Their continued existance given that implies that they must have a deep artistic and philosophical rooting.

That's a leap of logic I can't make. Could you elaborate on your line of thought on the matter?

    I assume that pretty much any mortal put on par with the gods would botch everything he touched until it bit him hard enough to learn caution.

That is fair. That being said, it doesn't mean that people must be careless simply because they encounter great power. There might be powerful idiots, of course, but the only reason they haven't been killed by their own hand yet must be pure luck, which isn't how the world works. It's not a Jim Carrey comedy. Figuring out and mastering magic must have taken quite a bit of high-level thought... which makes the idea of waking up whatever creature that dreams the world upstairs utterly ridiculous from the outside perspective.

Speaking of which: your description of the workings of magic is great because it makes a whole lot of sense to me, and I've never seen anything like that personally. Still...

    The chain of events that brought mages into the world

is what I'm having trouble with. "Projecting magic" doesn't sound to me like something the creature would do intentionally. I don't know much about the thing, it must be said, but it sounds to me like giving keys to the foundation of the world itself to lesser creatures is bound to cause some problems. I get it when hubris is upon humans, but the eldritch horror you describe surely must be above such petty mistakes! But maybe it's part of its dream and it can live with that.

What makes me wonder is how exactly this projected energy (not to be confused with magic, which is a ritual of using said energy) condenses in any way. I suppose you can mend it easily by saying that the creature just thought more of some places than others, thus giving it more innate power, because it's its dream, not the author's or DM's.

    Creating constructed languages feels way out of my depth

You don't have to create a whole language on the spot. I'll tell you a little secret about this process: no one can do it in snap time; it's always a lengthy and tedious process. You can start with simple things, however.

Let's say that there's a preposition "of" in the goblin language (which implies that the language is analytic - that is, uses auxiliary parts of speech to show relationships between parts of the sentence - or, at least, semi-analytical); let's say it's spelled, in transliteration, "ca" or "caa", to make it a bit more alien. Let's also say that "aya" means something goblins would call themselves natively (which might as well be their idea of themselves assigned to a number of symbols: there's nothing inherently "human" about humans), and that it has an objective case form of "ae" (there's a lot to explore with case forms, but let's keep it simple with the English's two-case system). Let's say, lastly, that prepositions that end with a vowel in Goblin have a tendency to get shortened before words starting with a vowel, much like in French ("je aime" becomes "j'aime", but "je mange" stays the way it is). So, we have "Caa Ae", meaning "Of Goblin" ("belonging to goblins"), which gets shortened to "C'ae" due to grammar... and there you have it. Simple, wasn't it? And from that, you can make other short phrases, like "caa ehme"/"c'ehme" being "of human", "caa nyeme" being "of elves" and so on.

Feel free to PM me if you ever decide to venture into constructing languages and/or would like to bounce some ideas of someone. I love working with language and would enjoy cooperating with you on the matter.

    I'm starting the campaign about a month after the capital exploded.

Then it's fair that the state hasn't fallen yet. It's also fair to note that, perhaps, with slower means of communication (which one would imagine a fantasy world possessing), state erosion would be a much slower process than today, in our world, with the Internet and mobile comms.

P.S. Take a look at Terminally Incoherent's work on reinventing fantasy races. It's a fantasy world where the author attempts to remake the archetypal ideas of fantasy in a more creative and vivid way. Some ideas go hand in hand with our perception of the tropes, some give them a new, radical overhaul.

user-inactivated  ·  3095 days ago  ·  link  ·  

I'm a few posts into the Terminally Incoherent blog now. It's really interesting, I'm definitely going to finish it and go back to my races before I do anything else with my project.

I'm trying to be more active on the irc here of late. I might ask some linguistic questions there too at some point .

user-inactivated  ·  3094 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Of course. Best of luck with your project. I hope it turns into something really good.