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user-inactivated  ·  3060 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: The L.E.D. Quandary: Why There’s No Such Thing as “Built to Last"

The punctuation, while accurate, is unnecessary because the sentence e could be simplified. For example, if I were to write it, it might come out like this . . .

    The bulb has been on almost continuously since 1901, he said. It surpassed a million hours in service in 2015, making it the longest-burning in the world according to Guinness World Records.




user-inactivated  ·  3060 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Does anyone know: is there word, or term, for how the first sentence is composed? Because I feel like I write like that a lot; it is a structure that I, if I were to read it, would probably want to smack myself for.

Devac  ·  3060 days ago  ·  link  ·  
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user-inactivated  ·  3060 days ago  ·  link  ·  

So, the issue with with the length of the sentence(s), not with the punctuation. Makes sense. Thanks for elaborating on that for me.

user-inactivated  ·  3060 days ago  ·  link  ·  

No. The issue is that the sentence is unnecessarily complex, creating a need for the extra punctuation. By rearranging the sentence structure and breaking it into two sentences, it cuts down on the punctuation and also makes it easier to read.

user-inactivated  ·  3060 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Would you agree that the original sentence would sound well spoken out? Reading it, perhaps, would be more difficult than it should be, but listening to it might give a different vibe - and it sounds to me that this vibe is fine.