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lil  ·  364 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: And the prompt was: Hubski Poetry

    Who can't watch horror they're too jumpy

I think about this a lot. There's so much horror right now and feelings of powerlessness -- yelling "ceasefire now" in every gathering, every day. People being accused of anti-this, anti-that, when we're just anti-slaughter. Compassion, compassion, people. We know this conflict in the Middle East is going to end very badly for a lot of people.

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But apart from that, I like your poem a lot. ... I'd like a word after "who can't ever be" ??





ThurberMingus  ·  363 days ago  ·  link  ·  

    who got knocked up and who can't ever be

The thought I had was "who can't ever be knocked up because infertility"

I would have never posted this if I tried to edit it. Poetry is too foreign a medium and a couple bits are too raw.